You have created the perfect character, an Italian fisherman working
the docks in "Down east" Maine (Aiyup). The character profile you have
created describes him to a tee. He's stocky - muscular, but not fat -
has dark hair, dark skin, a mustache, and, oh yes, an accent. Yes,
that's it. "Hee'ya has an accent'a."
From somewhere out in the literary landscape, a buzzer sounds. Your
reader has just gagged and closed your book she was perusing at the
bookstore. Game over. You lose.
How can you augment that special character, you have so painstakingly
developed, with the proper dialect to give him or her that final element
of authenticity?
Start with your ears. Many beginning writers think that accents and
dialects have to be phonetically rendered on the page to "sound" real.
The truth is that most dialects can be "heard" through the proper
cadence, or rhythm inherent within perfectly pronounced words.
Spend some time listening to accents. If you don't live somewhere that
provides you with that opportunity, rent some home videos with
characters from places far from your home. However you do it, use your
ears to determine what truly makes an accent. You might be very
surprised to discover that it has more to do with timing and word
placement than actual pronunciation. That's why lyrics, when sung,
tend to lessen the singer's accent. In part, the timing of the music
equalizes the cadence.
For instance, take my friend Carlos. He was born in Mexico but was
educated, and now resides, in Arizona. Most readers can relate to that.
Provide your reader with the character's history and let the dialogue do
the rest. (They will get it, honest.)
For example, you could write this dialogue for Carlos:
"Yes, Meester Smeeth. I weel be happee to go weeth you to thee
house."
Okay, that was a bit extreme. But, you don't have to pander to such
stereotypical tripe to give Carlos an accent. Give your readers more
credit than that. In the next example, the use of proper English is
enough for your reader to differentiate him from many people with
more "American" dialects. (Whatever that is.)
"Yes, Mister Smith," Carlos said, nodding slowly. "I will be happy to
accompany you to the house."
Most native-born Americans don't talk this way. Given that Carlos was
born in Mexico, the reader can fill in the fact that he is educated, and
likely speaks with an accent the reader can "hear". Or, you can simply
mention it in passing during some very early dialogue from that
character.